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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #105 on: February 01, 2017, 11:10:33 PM »
And here's the original draft's version of Jeff discovery that Daphne has been attacked:

37     EXT. CAR                                           37

       as it skids to a halt.  Jeff jumps out as the CAMERA
       TRUCKS him to the woman.  She turns sees him, SCREAMS
       and runs.

                                 JEFF
                            (running after her)
                 Wait, what's wrong?


37     CONTD                                        CONTD 37

                                 DAPHNE
                            (running from him)
                 No...no...

38     EXT. ROAD - NIGHT - LONG SHOT                      38

       Illuminated by the headlights, Jeff catches the woman.
       She fights him.

       SERIES OF INTERCUTTING CLOSE UPS

                                 DAPHNE
                 Don't touch me!

                                 JEFF
                 Daphne.  It's Jeff, what's happened?

       JEFF - DAPHNE

       He turns her to him.  She is crying.

                                 JEFF
                 My God!

39     JEFF'S POV - DAPHNE                                39

       CAMERA starts on her tear stained face, then PANS down.
       We see her neck, with two fang marks.  Blood runs from
       the open wound.  With a MOAN,  she faints, her face
       passing the CAMERA as she goes down.
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #106 on: February 02, 2017, 05:26:20 AM »
And now we need to deal with several scenes in DC's script that come up before the ones in which tomorrow's quotes appear:

38     EXT:  OLD HOUSE - NIGHT                           38
            an upper window
       From the door of the OLD HOUSE, we see the glare of a
       flashlight approaching.  There is a flash of lightning.
       Maggie carries a flashlight.

39     MAGGIE'S POV - OLD HOUSE                          39

       It is a dark, deserted, somber old house.

40     MAGGIE - MEDIUM - APPROACHES DOOR                40

       as she hesitates, suddenly a little fearful.  Then
       resolutely, goes to the door.  She opens it, flashes
       her light in the dark interior.  The CAMERA PANS with
       the flashlight.  We see the remnants of what once
       must have been a beautiful house.  There is furniture;
       some covered with dust sheets, some not.  The paint
       and paper are peeling.  Maggie walks a few steps inside
       the house, leaving the door open.

41     INT:  OLD HOUSE - NIGHT                           41

       as Maggie enters.  We see her apprehensive, worried
       face above her flashlight.

                             MAGGIE
                 David!

       There is no answer.  Maggie enters the drawing room,
       flashing her light around the room.


41     CONTD                                       CONTD 41

                             MAGGIE
                 David!
          she turns  to  cam
42     INT:  STAIRS - SHOOTING DOWN                      42
                       1st
       Maggie comes up the stairs.
        x to next stairs

End of scenes - though certainly not the end of the sequence.

And when it comes to what is different with the dialogue, Maggie actually calls out -


"David!"

- at the doorway before she even enters the house rather than after entering - and she doesn't call out to him a second time after she enters the drawing room.

And when it comes to what is different with the descriptions and directions, what we actually see in the exteriors is only bits and pieces of what's described in the script because we actually see Maggie walking -


- with her flashlight - and as the camera pans with her, the Old House -


- becomes visible - after which we then see Maggie from the side, shot from what does appear to be an upper window of the house (could it be David watching?) -


- as she walks along - however, at no point in any of this is there lightning.

And once we get to the interiors, Maggie does appear and hesitate at the doorway -


 - but there's no opening of a door or even an indication that a door still exists - and when Maggie enters the house, we can't tell that it must have once been a beautiful house because we don't really see anything except for dilapidation, no furniture covered with dust sheets, or not, and no paint and paper peeling, not even when Maggie looks in the drawing room because all we see is Maggie shining her flashlight around -


- but nothing of what she sees - and we don't see Maggie turn to camera at the end of that scene as DC wrote in his script that she would - and it isn't until Maggie begins to go up the stairs that we see sheets -


- but we can't really tell what they cover - and as Maggie ascends the stairs, unscripted, a cat jumps at her and frightens -


- her and she screams, after which the cat -


- meows from the shadows (possibly laughing at her in its own way [b003]), and Maggie tries -


- to pull herself together - but we only see her go up the first set of stairs about halfway, so we never see Maggie reach the top and cross to the next set of stairs as DC wrote in his script that she would.

And coming shortly, how all that plays in the original draft...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #107 on: February 02, 2017, 06:12:03 AM »
And here's the original draft's version of the first part of Maggie at the Old House, much of which is identical, some of which is not:

40     EXT. OLD HOUSE - NIGHT                             40

       From the door of the OLD HOUSE, we see the glare of a
       flashlight approaching.  There is a flash of lightning.
       Maggie carries a flashlight.

41     MAGGIE'S POV - OLD HOUSE                           41

       It is a dark, deserted, somber old house.

42     MAGGIE                                             42

       as she hesitates, suddenly a little fearful.  Then
       resolutely, goes to the door.  She opens it, flashes
       her light in the dark interior.  The CAMERA PANS with
       the flashlight.  We see the remnants of what once
       must have been a beautiful house.  There is furniture;
       some covered with dust sheets, some not.  There are
       cobwebs.  The paint and paper are peeling.  Maggie
       walks a few steps inside the house, leaving the door
       open.


43     INT:  OLD HOUSE - NIGHT                            43

       From the drawing room the CAMERA catches Maggie's
       light.  We see her apprehensive, worried face above it.

                                 MAGGIE
                 David!

       There is no answer.  Maggie enters the drawing room,
       flashing her light around the room.

                                 MAGGIE
                 Don't hide, David!

       Maggie hears a LOW MOAN.  She turns toward the stair-
       case.  She frowns, listens.  She hears the MOAN again.
       It is from upstairs.  Maggie runs to the stairs.

44     INT. STAIRS - SHOOTING DOWN                        44

                                 MAGGIE
                            (loudly)
                 David, I'm coming.

       Maggie runs up the stairs.

I do like the additional description of the cobwebs because in the film there are plenty of those.

And is it only me, but the "LOW MOAN" and the "coming", well...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #108 on: February 02, 2017, 09:30:06 PM »
And now here's a chart of when Scenes 21 through 40 were scheduled to shoot on the original shooting schedule:

||||Day of||
Scs. #s:|Location:|Pages:|Description:|Shoot:|Date:|Cast:
=====|===============|=====|==========|====|======|========
21*|Int. Stable (N)|6/8 Pg.|Roger argues|16th|Mon. 4/13|MAGGIE
|||with Maggie|||ROGER
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
22|Ext. Cemetery (N)|4/8 Pg.|Willie enters|1st|Mon. 3/23|WILLIE
|||the mausoleum|||
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
23 -25|Int. Mausoleum (N)|1 &|Willie finds|1st|Mon. 3/23|WILLIE
||1/8 Pgs.|the coffin|||Barnabas'
||||||hand
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
26|Int. 1st. Floor Hallway|5/8 Pg.|Liz offers|8th|Wed. 4/1|LIZ
|& Office (N)||Daphne a ride|||Daphne
|||home|||
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
27 - 31|Ext. Collinwood (N)|1 &|Daphne gets|5th|Fri. 3/27|Daphne
||2/8 Pgs.|attacked|||Barnabas
||||||Double
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
32 - 35|Ext. Collinwood (N)|4/8 Pg.|Jeff drives|5th|Fri. 3/27|JEFF
|||his car|||Jeff's car
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
36|Insert Shot|1/8 Pg.|Jeff's foot|5th|Fri. 3/27|
|||hits break|||
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
37|Ext. Road(outside|5/8 Pg.|Daphne babbles|5th|Fri. 3/27|JEFF
|Collinwood nr.||Jeff sees marks|||Daphne
|stable) (N)|||||
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________
38 - 40|Ext. Old House (N)|3/8 Pg.|Maggie enters|18th|Wed. 4/15|MAGGIE
_______|____________________|_______|_____________|______|________|__________

(*Scene 21 was shot at the same time as Scenes 19 and 20.)

You'll notice that even though Scene 36 was never shot, it did appear on the shooting schedule - at least the original schedule.

And as far as KLS' diary goes, I never realily noticed until today that there are no entries in it for the time she shot at the Schoales Estate/Beechwood/The Old House. How strange...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #109 on: February 02, 2017, 10:44:02 PM »
And now today's scenes in the slideshow:

43     INT:  CORRIDOR AT THE TOP OF THE STAIRS - NIGHT   43

       The CAMERA is at the far end of the corridor.  Maggie
       comes toward the camera.  Maggie stops at an open
       door.  She hears a sound inside.

And that's when today's first quotes -

Page 15/Scene 43 - Maggie: 'David! Are you in there?'

-comes up, followed in the script by:

             HALL
44     INT:  BEDROOM - NIGHT                             44
       CAM IN BEDROOM - MAG COMES DOWN HALL
       The room is a bedroom.  It is in shambles, but fur-
       nished.  Maggie flashes her light around the room.
       The CAMERA PANS with it.
                                    David, I heard you - I
                                     know your in here

And that's when today's second quotes -

Page 15/Scene 44 - Maggie: 'David, I am not going to punish you. Just let me take you home.'

-comes up, followed in the script by:

      There is no answer, just thunder and lightning.  A
      LOOSE SHUTTER BANGS AGAINST THE WINDOW.

End of scenes - though still not the end of the sequence.

And when it comes to what is different with the dialogue, today's first quote is never delivered as scripted because what actually happens is Maggie starts to say the -


"David"

- part of the line that DC added to his script, and then she says -


"I heard you"

- at the doorway as she enters the bedroom, however the "I know you're (as opposed to DC's your) in here" is actually dropped in the film - and soon, instead of the full second quote, Maggie actually says "David, I'm not going to punish you. I just want to take you home."

And when it comes to the differences in the directions and descriptions, the actual location/camera angle used for Scene 43 and the beginning of Scene 44 are the same. We see Maggie start down the hall and when she comes to an open door, she shines -


- her flashlight inside to investigate - but as soon as she hears the sound of a door close, she immediately looks in its direction -


- and shines her flashlight in the direction of another room, of which, as we saw above, she moves to - and as soon as she enters, as we can see in today's second capture -


she looks around. However, as per usual, there is no thunder or lightning. And there is also no sound of a loose shutter banging against the window.
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #110 on: February 02, 2017, 11:54:19 PM »
And before tomorrow's quote in the slideshow comes up, we have a lot more stuff to deal with. First up, what we must deal with in DC's script:

44A    Suddenly a closet door flies open and a FIGURE    44A
       runs out hitting Maggie's arm.  The flashlight
       drops, goes out.  It is David.  He runs out the
       door, slamming it.  Maggie, in the room, begins to
       pound on the door.

                             MAGGIE
                 David!  Let me out.  David!

       She stops, as she hears the CLICK OF A KEY BEING
       TURNED IN THE DOOR LOCK.  The CAMERA PANS down to the
       keyhole, then up to her as she begins pounding again.

                             MAGGIE
                 Open this door!

       She stops pounding.  There is silence.

                             MAGGIE
                 David!

      She hears a DOOR SLAM IN THE DISTANCE.  She slumps
      against the door,  What can she do now?  She turns,


                                                          Rev. 3/25/70

44A    CONTD                                       CONTD 44A

       Sees a flashlight on the floor, picks it up.  It will
       not work.  There is a flash of lightning.  She suddenly
       thinks she might see David outside.  She runs to the
       window, looks out CAMERA IN TIGHT.

45-51  DELETED

End of scenes. But that's only as far as DC's script goes. Coming before too long, we'll get into the above scene as it appears in the original draft. And then after that we'll get into Scenes 45 though 51 in the original draft to see what was dropped. And the reason we need to do that today is because tomorrow's quote in the slideshow comes from DC's Script's Scene 52...

But before all that, as far as any differences in the dialogue, the directions, or the descriptions go here, Maggie actually shouts her first -


"David!"

- as she runs to the door - and then once she reaches the door she pounds on it and says "David! Let me out. David!", as scripted - and after Maggie hears the key turn in the lock, we simply see her face in a panic -


- there is no camera pan down to the keyhole then back up to Maggie as she begins pounding again. In fact, absolutely nothing of the rest of the scene as scripted appears in the film. And note that the end of the scene appears to be a rewrite that was done on March 25 (and a rewrite that will last right through Scene 68B), so it will be interesting to see how things played in the original draft. If the entire scene is quite different or just the ending. I haven't checked yet, so we'll learn together...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #111 on: February 03, 2017, 02:23:52 AM »
Quote from: Mysterious Benefactor on February 02, 2017, 06:12:03 AM
And is it only me, but the "LOW MOAN" and the "coming", well...

Ooh, kinda racy for a GP movie!   [snow_grin]
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #112 on: February 03, 2017, 02:29:16 AM »
Were the upstairs scenes in this sequence filmed at Lockwood-Mathews?  The architecture seems to fit with that house.  (I know that the scene of Julia giving Barnabas an injection was filmed there--in a bathroom, IIRC.  Where the crew damaged a marble fixture.)
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #113 on: February 03, 2017, 03:18:08 AM »
And here's the original draft's version of the next part of Maggie at the Old House. And again, much of it is identical to DC's script's version, but some of it is not:

45     INT. CORRIDOR AT THE TOP OF THE STAIRS - NIGHT     45

       The CAMERA is at the end of the corridor, next to a
       door.  There is a MOAN from within the door.  Maggie
       enters the corridor, runs toward the camera.  There is
       another MOAN from within the room.  Maggie stops at
       the door, open it, runs into the room.

                                 MAGGIE
                 David!  Are you all right?

46     INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT                               46

       The room is a bedroom. It is in shambles, but fur-
       nished.  Maggie flashes her light around the room.
       The CAMERA PANS with it.

                                 MAGGIE
                 David, I'm not going to punish
                 you.  Just let me take you home.

       There is no answer, just THUNDER and lightning.  A
       LOOSE SHUTTER BANGS AGAINST THE WINDOW.  Then she
       thinks she hears something in the hall.  She
       whirls around, flashing her light at the door.
       Her back is to the window and the CAMERA.

       The drapery behind her moves.  A FIGURE lunges
       from the drapery, hitting Maggie's arm. The flash-
       light drops, goes out.  Maggie GASPS.  It is David.


46     CONTD                                        CONTD 46

                                 MAGGIE
                 David!

       He runs through the darkness to the door.  Maggie
       runs after him. He runs out the door, slamming it.
       Maggie, in the room, begins to pound on the door.

                                 MAGGIE
                 David!  Let me out.  David!

       She stops, as she hears the CLICK OF A KEY BEING
       TURNED IN THE DOOR LOCK.  The CAMERA PANS down to
       the keyhole, then up to her as she begins pounding
       again.

                                 MAGGIE
                 Open this door!

       She stops pounding, hears FOOTSTEPS WALKING down
       the steps.

                                 MAGGIE
                 David!

       She hears a DOOR SLAM IN THE DISTANCE.  She slumps
       against the door,  What can she do now?  She turns
       sees the flashlight on the floor, picks it up.  It
       will not work.  There is a flash of lightning.  She
       suddenly thinks she might see David outside.  She
       runs to the window, looks out.

Well, the end to Scene 46 is pretty much identical to DC's script's Scene 44A. About the only thing missing is the camera going in for a tight shot at the very end. Though it's interesting that Scene 46 combines both Scene 44 and Scene 44A in DC's script. And it's also interesting that, just like in the film, in Scene 46 here, Maggie also calls out a "David!" before she goes to the door and shouts "David! Let me out. David!" And as we've already seen, that's not the first time some small thing that had been dropped from the original script actually made it into the film.
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #114 on: February 03, 2017, 03:20:14 AM »
Quote from: KMR on February 03, 2017, 02:29:16 AM
Were the upstairs scenes in this sequence filmed at Lockwood-Mathews?  The architecture seems to fit with that house.

I don't honestly remember. I'll have to check the shooting schedule...
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« Reply #115 on: February 03, 2017, 05:18:03 AM »
And now here's what's missing from DC's script as it appears in the original draft:

45     MAGGIE'S POV - OLD HOUSE GROUNDS

       There is nothing but the rain and darkness.

46     INT. BEDROOM - NIGHT

       Maggie turns back to the room, beginning to feel a
       little desperate.  She sees a half burnt candle on a
       bureau.  She finds matches in her pocket.  She lights
       the candle, sits down to wait.

47     INT. DRAWING ROOM - COLLINWOOD - NIGHT

       TIGHT SHOT - DAPHNE'S NECK - THE WOUNDS
       enters the corridor, runs toward the camera.  There is
       A HAND is gently washing the blood from around the
       wounds.  The CAMERA PULLS BACK.  JULIA HOFFMAN, an
       attractive, chic woman, finishes her chore.  Jeff Clark
       watches her.

                                 JEFF
                 Doctor, you must have some idea!

                                 JULIA
                 None.  Do you?

       He shakes his head that he doesn't.

                                 JULIA
                 You saw nothing?  No animal?

                                 JEFF
                 Animal?  What kind of animal could
                 it be?

                                 JULIA
                            (preparing a hypodermic)
                 We'll have to find that out, won't
                 we?

48     INT. FOYER - COLLINWOOD - NIGHT
       CLOSEUP - LIZ

                                 LIZ
                 I wanted to send Daphne home in the
                 car --

49     CAMERA PULLS BACK to GROUP SHOT.  CAROLYN STODDARD,
       Liz's beautiful, young daughter, with her handsome
       fiancee TODD have just come in, heard the news.  Mrs.
       Johnson watches from the staircase.

                                 CAROLYN
                 Now, mother, it's not your fault.

                                 LIZ
                 With David out there...Oh thank God
                 you're home.

                                 TODD
                 I'll go out and look for David, Mrs.
                 Stoddard.

                                 LIZ
                 Do be careful, Todd.

                                 MRS. JOHNSON
                 You won't find him.  I know David
                 Collins.  He's hiding somewhere as
                 safe as he can be.  It's Maggie Evans
                 I'm worried about.

       Jeff enters from the drawing room.

                                 JEFF
                 What about Maggie?

                                 LIZ
                 She went hunting for David.  Roger
                 told her not to --

                                 JEFF
                            (very worried)
                 Where?  Where did she go?

50     EXT. OLD HOUSE - NIGHT - LONG LENS

       The only light is from a candle in the upstairs bedroom
       window.  SLOW ZOOM in on the light.

The end there. And I must say a few things:

Who knew Todd is really a woman (he's referred to as Carolyn's "fiancee" rather than fiance. That must mean Carolyn is actually supposed to be a lesbian in the film. Who knew that - or that the Collinses were way ahead of their time and accepting of gay marriage. The things you learn.

And you can certainly tell that the original draft was written before they knew they would be shooting at Lyndhurst because it would have been an amazing achievement for Mrs Johnson to have been able to see and watch the goings on in Lyndhurst's foyer from her perch on Lyndhurst's staircase!

And speaking of Mrs. Johnson, it's quite a shame that she never got to deliver the lines originally written for her, particularly with Clarice Blackburn delivering them - it would have been a perfect move for Mrs. Johnson and Clarice in the film. But alas...

Which actually brings us to something else because that scene actually had a rewrite before it was removed entirely. Not only were Mrs. Johnson's lines split between other characters, and some of Liz' lines given to Carolyn, and the location of the scene changed to Lyndhurst's card room, but the scene was extended quite a bit - and an additional scene was added between it and the scene of the candle in the Old House's bedroom window (making the full 7 scenes beginning with Scene 45 and ending with Scene 51):

49     INT. CARD ROOM - NIGHT

(I'm not repeating what's exactly the same from the beginning but starting off where Mrs. Johnson's lines are handed over.)

       Roger enters the room.

                                 ROGER
                 You won't find him.  I know my son.
                 He's hiding somewhere as safe as he
                 can be.

                                 CAROLYN
                 It's Maggie I'm worried about.

       Jeff enters from the drawing room and crosses to
       Carolyn anxiously.

                                 JEFF
                 What about Maggie?

                                 CAROLYN
                 She went hunting David.

                                 JEFF
                 Where?  Where did she go?

                                 ROGER
                 We don't know.  I consider it foolish
                 of her to go out on such a wild goose
                 chase.  David can take care of him-
                 self!

                                 JEFF
                            (angrily)
                 You should be grateful that she's so
                 concerned for the boy.

                                 LIZ
                 We're not doing Maggie any good
                 standing here arguing.  Someone
                 should try to find her and bring her
                 back.

                                 CAROLYN
                 You're right.

                                 JEFF
                            (to Roger)
                 How could you let Maggie go out
                 alone on a night like this?

                                 ROGER
                            (annoyed)
                 She went without consulting me! I'd
                 thought I'd made that clear.

                                 JEFF
                 I'll see if I can locate her.

       He starts out to the hall.  All the others follow, with Liz
       ad libbing suggestions of where Maggie might be.

50     INT. FOYER - NIGHT

       Jeff and Liz enter the foyer.  Carolyn, Todd and Roger
       follow.  Jeff opens the front door.  David is standing
       there framed by the wet darkness.

                                 DAVID
                 I've come back.

51     EXT. OLD HOUSE - NIGHT - LONG LENS

       The only light is from a candle in the upstairs bedroom
       window.  SLOW ZOOM in on the light.

And there are a few things interesting about all these scene because in some cases they either repeat or contradict future scenes in the March 25th rewrite, which is no doubt why they were dropped. Though it's a shame that we didn't get to see Roger lie through his teeth to Jeff because, even in the original draft, Maggie tells Roger that she is going to the Old House to look for David and asks if he wants to accompany her - though, of course, Roger being Roger, he declines in some not very polite Rogerly ways. So, he knows damn well where Maggie's gone. But he's not about to let it look like he's in any way at fault - not our Roger!!  [ghost_nowink]
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #116 on: February 03, 2017, 06:16:08 PM »
Just for the fun of it, I checked the novelization and discovered that not only did it use the rewritten/extended version of Scene 49, it used the above versions of Scenes 45 through 48 and Scenes 50 through 51. Apparently "Marilyn" Ross wasn't given a copy of the original draft of the script for the novelization, but Ross wasn't given the latest version either, which could prove interesting down the line.  I'm going to have to keep comparing to see where things are different - and if I find anything, whether or not it's worth mentioning...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #117 on: February 03, 2017, 07:28:03 PM »
Here's today's scene as it plays in DC's script (and keep in mind that it's part of the March 25th rewrite):

52     WIDE SHOT - MAGGIE SITTING ON BED                 52

       She hears the MUFFLED THUD OF A DOOR SLAMMING.
       She goes to the door.  She hears a second  DOOR SLAM.
       NEARER NOW.

And that's when today's quote -

Page 16/Scene 52 - Maggie (SHOUTING): 'All right, David. That's enough. Let me out of here, David!'

- comes up.

End of scene.

And as far as any differences in the dialogue, the directions, or the descriptions go here, while Maggie is sitting on the bed, she checks the flashlight -


- (which is something we never saw her do in Scene 44A) and after she sees it doesn't work, she casts it aside on the bed and takes in the darkness -


-around her (because the whole bit about her having found a candle is gone - which is no doubt why Scene 51 was dropped from the script) - and after she hears the muffled thud of the door and she goes to the door of the bedroom and soon hears the sound of another door, she actually says a plaintive -


"David."

- rather than the shouting that is scripted. It's as if the opening bits of Scene 52 would seem to be something of a reworking of some of the second half of Scene 44A that never made it into the film...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #118 on: February 03, 2017, 09:10:55 PM »
And here's the original draft's version of the above, as well as one more scene, of which we'll see makes up for the added scene in the original rewrite because that rewrite sort of has a bit of the upcoming second scene here and the original rewrite's "added" scene (of which now I can say without confusing the hell out of everyone is really just the moving and reworking of an already existing scene in the original draft):

53     INT. OLD HOUSE BEDROOM - NIGHT                     53

       Maggie is by the window with the candle.  She hears
       the MUFFLED THUD OF A DOOR SLAMMING.  She goes to the
       door.  She hears a SECOND DOOR SLAM.  NEARER NOW.

                                 MAGGIE
                 All right, David!  That's enough.
                 Let me out of here.  David!

54     INT. FOYER - COLLINWOOD - NIGHT                    54
       GROUP SHOT - JEFF, LIZ, CAROLYN, TODD and MRS.
       JOHNSON

                                 JEFF
                 How could you let Maggie go out
                 alone on a night like this!?

       The main door opens. DAVID stands there.

                                 DAVID
                 I've come back!

And that will be it for the original draft for a while because DC's version of the script will next be dealing with the March 25th's rewrites of some of Scenes 45 through 51 (though not in the order they appear in what I shared) and his version of the script won't meet up to what's coming up next in the original draft until DC's script reaches its Scene 54D, which, as far as the slideshow is concerned, is two script pages, 11 quotes, and 9 days from now...
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Re: And Now The Return of Another New Slideshow (Sort of), Part 2 [**Now featuring alternate versions of scenes - see replies #18,#21,#23,#49,#64,#69,#76,#88,#90,#100,#105,#107,#115**]
« Reply #119 on: February 04, 2017, 07:32:04 PM »
And now two scenes (which are quite different from the way deleted scenes 48/49/Rewrite 49 and Rewrite 50 play) to catch us up in DC's script to today's quote:

53     EXT:  SIDE ENTRANCE COLLINWOOD - NIGHT            53

       David at side door, sneaks into house.

54     INT:  HALLWAYS - NIGHT                            54

       David closes the door carefully.  He hears Liz's
       voice.  He freezes.  - She sits in a chair

And that's when today's quote -

Page 16/Scene 54 - Liz (O.S.): 'I've tried to call Roger everywhere. He should be here!'

- comes up.

End of scene - but certainly not the end of the sequence.

And as far as any differences in the dialogue, the directions, or the descriptions go here, while it's not listed in the Movie Book as either being missing or never shot, Scene 53 doesn't appear in the film - Scene 54 actually begins with a shot of the closed side door -


- and then David opens it -


-and comes in, after which he hears Liz' voice (and only the part of Liz actually saying "Where can Roger be? I've tried to reach him everywhere" is delivered off screen), but he doesn't freeze as scripted because he actually moves slowly and carefully to stand by the doorway to the Card Room -


- to peer in - and, as can be seen in today's capture -



- we see Liz standing by the window, not sitting in a chair, as DC added to his script, and saying the "He should be here!" part of her quote onscreen - and then we see David as an extremely pleased with himself smile -


- comes over his face.
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